My Egg Friend

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on wednesday the 21th of october class 9 from pt england school had an egg race at the playground.

I got an egg of my teacher i give my egg friend a name and drew his face my egg friend’s name was oscar jacobson then we went to the park.

when we got to the park we got instructions from mr bax we got an spoon from mr bax then he took photo’s of us with our egg’s.

after that we had our egg race we had to go over 5 thing’s then under 4 thing’s it was fun i didn’t want to do it because i wanted to look after my egg friend i was watching ata she was the one that win after the race we went back to class.

When we went back to class i was looking after my egg friend after that my egg friend went to sleep on me then i woke up my egg friend then i was playing with my egg after that i had to put my egg friend away.

My egg was very friendly and went to sleep and didn’t want to play the game my egg is very friendly.